About joy they were always right,
The young: how they lived
Its innocent nature; how they play
While others work and stress on what life may bring.
How, when the son waits patiently
And is in awe as his father teachers him
To become a man.
That moment is never forgotten
That even relationships run its course
and bridges are burned on both sides.
But they never forgot.
Anyhow, in the middle of the room
Where furniture is laid to rest with the father,
as blinking lights distracts and retracts from time.
In Starry Night, for instance: how the sky moves
Quite quickly, as the town lays at rest,
not wanting to join in.
But the sky will continue to kiss the stars,
as the town is lost in slumber.
Something amazing, the town awakens at dawn,
And joins the sky as it moves quite quickly.
Tuesday, September 22, 2009
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Lovely. You really capture the tone.
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem. I love how similar it is to the original, but still has a different viewpoint. I especially like your last four lines about Starry Night.
ReplyDeleteYou did an amazing job with this poem; as Rose said, you really capture the tone well, but you also lend your own voice to it quite nicely. I think the "That even relationships run its course/and bridges are burned on both sides" lines are brilliant.
ReplyDeletei loved the languaged you picked to paint this story. the starry night, the bridge burning,the father son relationship, it all worked really well, i enjoyed it :)
ReplyDeleteYou captured the tone Auden used in “Musee des beaux arts,” but also made it your own in a way that suited it very well. The lines are very striking.
ReplyDelete- K. De Melo.
I thought your use of Starry Night very visual. You might find this interesting: www.youtube.com/watch?v=zZqftCZD2NI
ReplyDeleteThe last part reminds me of one of my favorite poems. it's by Anne Sexton. She writes about the 'Starry Night' painting: "the night boils with eleven stars."
ReplyDeleteAnd I thought about how accurate/smart/right you were, just as she was, to find the most vital characteristic of that painting in its sense of movement, and to describe it so well.